The Middle of the End (zengaya) wrote in a_carton,
The Middle of the End
zengaya
a_carton

I got three poems to show.

I actually would like some feedback on these. You don't have to give a line by line, stanza by stanza critique, something more general is fine. I'm mostly just curious about what you guys think about poems that don't sound very poetic.



Prayer

I don't know
the names of many
famous authors.

I don't know
why they write
or when they started
or how they
go about it
all and

God help me
if I ever
do.



Shame

A friend told me
that if it had been her
that screwed up like that
she'd have worked twice
as hard to make up
for it.

I didn't know what to say
to that.

We kept walking.

If it had been me
I'd have slunk
out the room
and buried my
face in
an ant hill.

Anything
is better
than their
eyes.




I'm Sorry, But


I have to kill your boyfriend.

I haven't decided how,
maybe a little rat poison
in his toothpaste,
a cartoon anvil dropped
from a rooftop,

or that old classic,
let's-get-drunk-and-
go-hunting.

I don't know how
he has to go,

but I know why.

How bout we
get together
and
explain
it to him?
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