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[01 Aug 2005|03:07pm]
jazzybabyfame
poetic
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- A rating community for poets!
- Weekly Prompts!
- Critiques!
- Lots of poetry!
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i know [01 Mar 2004|05:34am]

bloodjetpoetry
this community has been dead for a while (except for posts made by Rodia and Roku, whom i thank), but please do not cross-post personal journal entries. (this is for new people, not for people who have already been posting here and know the rules).

i promise i'll be back to comment on work when i'm not feeling so ... lacking and stagnant.
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Uhh, poem? [02 Feb 2004|01:38am]

roku
Untitled/04Collapse )

Yo, all. Sorry if this is a really pathetic attempt. I wanted to write it. Tah-dahh.
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[21 Jan 2004|04:34pm]

bloodjetpoetry
this stupid piece of shit is dissolving, motherfuckers.
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[19 Dec 2003|10:52pm]

zengaya
Hey guys, got some poems.

Specific feedback is always appreciated, but since I'm showing more than one poem I'm down with just some general feedback and maybe a little pointing out of lines and phrases that make you think, "what this nigga be talkin bout?!"

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News, Rules, Poems [19 Dec 2003|08:42pm]

bloodjetpoetry
Hey guys, community has seemed a little slow since winter break started for most of us, so I'm here to get things going again.

First off, I got into that advanced poetry workshop back at dartmouth, and I feel a little happy, but not totally excited. I had a lot of issues with my introductory creative writing class that was application-only, also. But hopefully things will work out next term.

Now a couple of announcements: people who haven't really done their share of commenting on other people's work, please do so. There won't be any kicking-out of members, but it's just more fair to give feedback to others when they've done the same for you. Oh, and matthieu_a_gogo and I decided to make the rule that members shouldn't use the mood and music options when they post, cause, well ... us knowing you're listening to J.Lo and feeling sleepy is pretty useless. Besides, if you're listening to J.Lo, you're automatically banned from this community because she can just go and die.

Okay, now for some poems. The second one, you don't have to give feedback to if you don't want - it's just for fun, but if you do have things to say about it, I'd appreciate it all the same. I just wrote these a couple of nights ago so they are very rough.

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Hello! [12 Dec 2003|01:22am]

shamzmam
[ mood | Not too shabby. ]

Hello, everyone! Figured I'd start off posting something I wrote a while back that I liked.

Some old ramblin'.Collapse )

-Stephen

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[11 Dec 2003|10:48pm]

undone_one
Umm, let's see how the reaction is to this one.

When I SayCollapse )
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[10 Dec 2003|10:16pm]

undone_one
short, not sweet

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[09 Dec 2003|09:37am]

undone_one
Hello everyone. I just want to say that I think it's great to have a community like this. I think general comments are good, but if anyone wants to pinpoint any specific lines, please feel free to. Thanks.

I've got a little something I wrote a couple weeks ago. As I'm looking at it now, the second stanza is probably overworked and over the top. In case you are interest in the process: the first stanza just came to me, while the second one was a visual in my head I struggled to put into words.

old hauntsCollapse )

Also, I'm planning to delve in at the end of the week (after finals) and read/comment on what everyone has been upto.
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Kcuf Haey Sehctib [09 Dec 2003|08:06am]

bloodjetpoetry
So i cannot sleep. so WHAT.

It means i can write crazy shit when dawn cracks open my head with its goddamn sun.
i don't know. the poem is a little strange, but i like it.

this is rough as i WROTE IT THIS MORNING/NIGHTCollapse )
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"We shall strike tomorrow" [08 Dec 2003|10:17am]

okayprime
We were going to play a joke.

You know that prank that involves rudely sticking your finger in someone's food at the dinner table and saying "You gonna eat that?" Well, at the same time, Henry, Danny, Danny's roommate, Marcus and I were going to do it to my next door neighbor, Gabby.

It was simple enough, three coughs, and then we would strike. But at the last minute, Danny wanted to change the strike command, complaining that three coughs would be "a little too obvious."

He stupidly suggested the codewords "I hear the TAs are going on strike," and I, even more stupidly decided to comply.

But there was a problem with the seating arrangement when we came in, as Gabby was nearly surrounded by people not involved in the joke, and only Marcus and I would be able to attack like asps. We didn't foresee this.

Then the words came. "I hear the TAs are going on strike," said Danny. But I froze, my conscience hitting me, and I think it was the same for Marcus. Gabby said, "What the hell are you talking about, Danny?" and shook his head.

I whispered to Danny,"Man, I don't think I can go on with it."

"But you have to!"

"Tomorrow...let's regroup tomorrow," as the chance to strike was diminishing with every bite Gabby took.

But Gabby got a piece of pie for dessert...a last chance opportunity! As Marcus and I looked at each other, determined that we were going to do it. We were about to do it, when Gabby took the pie and left.

"What's he doing?" Danny said.

"Do you think he knows what's up?" I said.

"Maybe he went to eat it somewhere else." Marcus added.

But Gabby came back, with a pie mounded with ice cream and whipped cream, and said:

"Man, you don't know what I had to go through to get this. I had to wait in line to microwave this, then to put on the whipped cream and the ice cream."

I bet this made it much harder for people involved, but for me, this was definitely the time to do it. The last failure strengthened my resolve.

I looked at Marcus, my partner in crime, he sheepishly nodded no. He would not do it, and all the blame would rest on me if I did it by myself.

In spite of all of our planning, we had failed to defile Gabby's dinner.
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[06 Dec 2003|12:26pm]

zengaya
I got three poems to show.

I actually would like some feedback on these. You don't have to give a line by line, stanza by stanza critique, something more general is fine. I'm mostly just curious about what you guys think about poems that don't sound very poetic.

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[05 Dec 2003|02:12pm]

lordhoratio
Horatio here. Sorry I haven't really jumped in with the community yet. I'm going to! Just as soon as Finals Week is over and I get The Cerebral Catalyst up and running again. Cheers.
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[03 Dec 2003|10:44am]

zengaya
You don't really have to respond to this one if you don't feel like it.

BullshitCollapse )
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Strike One [03 Dec 2003|03:27am]

matthieu_a_gogo
This will be my first and worst entry to a_carton. Thanks for being the flesh on the bones of this community.


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[03 Dec 2003|01:09am]

roku
[ mood | sleepy ]

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Awesomeness. [30 Nov 2003|04:04pm]

bloodjetpoetry
I first want to say that I'm really glad that the community has gotten off to a good, fast start. A lot of good work has been posted and people are doing a pretty decent job of giving feedback.

Secondly, I want every member to in some way try to promote the community. Post on other communities, message boards, or just tell people you know who are decent writers to apply!

Thirdly, I have a creative writing application due on Dec. 3rd, which means I have to submit my poems (it's an advanced poetry workshop). I may get accepted or rejected, so I'll be posting a load of poems up here, probably. Please help me out and give tons of feedback! Thanks ...

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Application to A Carton of Eggs. [30 Nov 2001|02:00pm]

roku
Ok, forgive me, I joined. I'm really happy you started this group, Syd (and happy Rodia's in it already XD) and err.. if I am a lost cause I'll leave again and stalk you all from a distance!
The short is kind of boring, in my own opinion, but it was improv. The poem's saving grace is how short it is :D :D :D

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[29 Nov 2003|01:37pm]

zengaya
DaydreamCollapse )
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